I Figured out why the first bar didnt sound right, so I thought I would edit it, but I 
figure it out, so I thought I would just redo it

E|--7----5----7----10---|--7h10p7-7----------------------|
B|----0----0----0-----0-|--------------8-8-7-5--8p7p5p---|
G|----------------------|--------------------------------|
D|----------------------|--------------------------------|
A|----------------------|--------------------------------|
E|----------------------|--------------------------------|

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MfHMcctrKWA
Theres the song if you wanna test it out
I will take edits if you figure out something that sounds closer.